Any comments, if you can actually sit to read, because i understand it's long.

It's a good effort. I would like to hear more about the character and how he interacts with the world, not so much his entire personal philosophy, categorized into sections, and only the teacher's limited reaction.

 

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yeah i agree, thanks for the comment though, im very unorganized, but thats what i like, but i hope to be doing how the character interacts soon. I def need to get better, because i somewhat suck. thanks.

 

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Comments? Well, it's rather incoherent but that's okay as long as you're going for a stream of consciousness effect. Your ideas aren't insane, the concepts are part and parcel of religion and philosophy (reality as god's dream, infinite regression of creation, the problem of evil, the evolution of god, etc).

My suggestions; stick around and visit the religion and philosophy forums, you'll see many of these ideas being bounced around. Participating will help you to hone your ideas and your writing. Read more about the philosophy of religion and metaphysics. You'll find that as you learn more you'll be able to express these ideas more clearly and you'll find out where others have gone before.

~Raithere

 

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wtf.

 

holy fucking shit!!!!!!!!!!

I knew that I wouldn't read it when I saw it was more than 2 paragraphs long!

 

I enjoyed it. Thanks. I wonder, how it would be like, if it evolved into a mind sci-fi?

 

I didn't mind the longevity, i just didn't like the randomness.

 

When i read that it gave me a simular feelin as when i was readin Marry Shellys "Frankinstine" (1 of my favort books).!!!

PS
Welcom to the groop.!!!

 

Well... beter late than never to welcom sombody to the groop... thats what i always say... eh

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oh...3 years old. then i have wasted my time. and yours.