A Poem Thread

Discussion in 'Art & Culture' started by Angelus, Nov 9, 2002.

  1. jessiej920 Shake them dice and roll 'em Valued Senior Member

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    I like this. Great flow and interesting imagery. The mental image of a 'razor-bird' alone is powerful.

    I also love your poem The Masterplan of the Grimoddwin Man. I remember the story about Raw-head Rex and I like the spin you put on your poem to make it sound more like a Celtic bard's tale.
     
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  3. jessiej920 Shake them dice and roll 'em Valued Senior Member

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    Addiction

    The simplicity
    The smoothness of the uncut pages of my heart
    Here lies my bleeding veins
    Fed by chambers hollowed and torn apart

    The breath squeezes from my lungs
    As if an iron fist held fast
    This wretched heaven; life fluttering, pulse pounding
    Raked each cry from me as if it were my last

    The headlands of my memories
    Cut dark horizons on pale skin
    And each razor held in trembling grip
    Split those thoughts so paper thin

    And my mind zoomed toward oblivion
    Those hollow chambers echoed long
    Each beat followed in desperate step
    To some obscure and painful song

    Save me! Release me! A violent plea
    Shackles bind these claw-like hands
    Dreams, they chase me through twilit day
    And I lose myself on on tear-wet lands
     
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  5. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    A fine poem Jessie, very introspective.

    "And what shoulder and what art could twist
    the sinuses of thine heart?"
     
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  7. jessiej920 Shake them dice and roll 'em Valued Senior Member

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    "When thy heart began to beat,
    What dread hand forged thy dread feet?"

    I love that poem.

    my fave line:

    "In what distant deeps or skies
    Burnt the fire of thine eyes?"
     
  8. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    Beyond the Gray Dogs Howl.

    In the spring of Mim, Odin’s eye did sink
    he plucked his siteful orb and pledged it to the
    wide-famed pool.
    As the ball did fall it glinted at the well and cast a worthy
    wisdom spell.

    He drank the wine black spill and his sightless socket
    saw across the wide expanse, beyond the gray dogs howl,
    near the pond that Hylas found.

    And on that blasted ground the steps of men did pound,
    and giants join in battle and a dragon scorched the ground.

    A wolf ate half the moon, as to confirm a doom, that
    the trickster does ride forth on Ginnungagap’s blasted plane,
    to meet the father of all the slain.

    The gray dog howled again and the battle then was joined,
    for who can stop the wine black sea when the wind does
    call, the tree of life will fall!

    And all those hero’s in his thrall, throw their lives into the maul,
    but one by one they all too fall.

    Giants too die proud, gods and monsters all abound,
    broken on the muddy ground.

    And in the dark black night, the sparks of fire light the
    bodies bright as Muspellsheim the kingdom of fire fell
    from the ravaged sky.

    Midgard did then burn, and into ash Asgard too was turned
    forever to be lost amongst the bones on Ginnungagap.

    So Odin looked away, and closed his socket then in shame,
    but the sightless eye had seen, and forever in his waking
    dreams the one eyed god will scream, as he hangs in
    penance upon high Yggdrasil.

    So drink not from the spring of Mim, remember what
    Odin's seen? Would you understand yet, or what or
    would know more?
     
  9. Bebelina kospla.com Valued Senior Member

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    This sounds kind of similar to what a dead friend of mine wrote, the Albatross ( the name of the poem).
     
  10. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    It doesn’t have any connection to Samuel Taylor Coleridge. Does it?
     
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  11. Bebelina kospla.com Valued Senior Member

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    I don't know, never heard of him.
     
  12. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    Samuel Taylor Coleridge (21 October 1772 – 25 July 1834) was an English poet, Romantic, literary critic and philosopher.
    He is probably best known for his poems 'The Rime of the Ancient Mariner' and 'Kubla Khan'.
    The Albatross was one of the major symbolic elements in his poem 'The Rime of the Ancient Mariner'.
    From that comes the expression, 'To have an Albatross around ones neck'.
     
  13. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    Echoes Down a Windy Hall

    A metronome ticks away the beating of his heart.
    He’s here, in this world again and it’s an ache to
    function.
    There’s a taste in his mouth of profound numbness,
    like intoxication, but joy has fled because the sadness
    has come again like it always does.

    Like a cloud it came, whist Hypnos ruled, and in his dreams
    it tortured him with a repetition of inanities until he was
    driven to wakefulness.
    In the dark he chanted his litany, the one he always used
    when the mad, bad gloom enveloped him.

    ‘Nothing, No One, No Where! He chanted as if to cancel
    himself out of existence, soon he knew the sun would rise
    and the demon would be again consigned to its stony
    cavern.

    And as dawns false promise filled the sky, he sped to
    his work, but as he treads through the empty streets in the
    house he’s just deserted, a sleeping cat awakes momentarily
    as the first shafts of light lance through the panes.

    It flicks its ears disinterestedly as a cloud half-visible in
    the shadow mote by mote dissolves.
    ‘Next time it’ whispers as it echoes down the windy hall.
     
  14. sargentlard Save the whales motherfucker Valued Senior Member

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    The rain softly spoke to me, it said "don't go"

    The cold kept quietly whispering in my ear "You don't have to leave"

    The bedsheet, bathed in our body heat and embracing, asked me "Why don't you stay?"

    The blanket, old and wise, guarding over us like a sentry in dawn told me "Move close to her"

    Her hair, flowing like an untamed river on the pillow ground, beautiful in it's indecision of flow, murmured to me "Come near me, I smell of comfort and familiarity"

    Her skin, smooth and young, a terrain of familiar features and markings reminding me of home, requested from me "Come feel my warmth"

    Upon the first caress, the first landing she turned and enveloped me with her arms, holding me close, still asleep, probably holding on a sweet dream and my body screamed to me "don't move, just stay, there's peace in her arms, a kind the world has never known"

    All the while the minutes mocked me, shouting "This will all end"
    Each minute more condescending than the last
    Each minute growing more irksome as it neared its end.
    Losing it's precious few seconds, it saved its last breath to proclaim the futility of it all.
    Each minute sent by the world to drag me closer to our eventual reunion.

    Then her warm breath on my neck drowned out the minutes voices
    Her scent quieting all, friend and foe, speaking only to me, said "Let it be, just let it be"

    and that's all I needed to hear.
     
  15. otheadp Banned Banned

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    So... I was doing quite a bit of hard drugs a few months ago... (it's true what they say - drugs bring you creativity, because as creative as I am, I doubt I'd be able to write something like this without outside influence) ...and this one did something to my brain, and one day during a comedown, as I set in my cubicle at work I wrote the following. It would make one great short cartoon...

    Anyway, here it is:

    Septu woke up in cold sweat, because the giggles always make him perspire cold water. He put on his sandwich shoes and went out for a smoke on the ceiling. When he was done he went back into the telephone and jumped into the switch, where it's safe - where only water could engulf him and no soundwaves could bounce off of his nose. The thought of a monkey ripping out his nostril hair startled him quite severely. He ran away to Algonquin park to meditate on top of a tree as 3 bears were setting their beds right under, wearing blond wigs. When the bears finished dining on 'coon soup they took off their tuxedo butterfly ties - more like they loosened them - and proceeded to light their individual pipes containing angel hair pasta. When they were done they felt like taking a number two because smoking relaxes your bowels, and so they proceeded to wipe with the rabbits. The rabbits' cylinder hats fell to the ground and got some dirt on them. They felt dirty and used so they never bothered to clean up. What's gone is gone. The bears decided to perform a little show for Septu. They put on overalls with one big red button to keep the overalls on, and did a few Chinese acrobatics tricks, the whole time smiling to be good showmen (showbear). They were wearing red lipstick as part of their act). For the final act, when they were done, they stood on one leg, coordinating their acrobatics and went "ta daaaa" with their hands. The flat top hats appeared on their heads, with the red ribbons, that matched their red lipstick and red-striped overalls. Then the 3 of them turned into one small butterfly moth and fluttered away into the bushes, never to be heard from again.

    Septu left his comfortable caccoon and turned into a fast cheetah. He started running in the woods, sprinting towards the piece of bloody cheese awaiting for him 17 miles deep into the forest, inside the wizard's sleeve. He kept running with agility, thinking of his prize as a tiny red deer alberta sasquatch dove down on him and picked him up in his claws, taking him high into the sky. Septu turned into mist and dove into the tiny sasquatch's nostrils, invading his lungs. The lungs were dark and moist and beehive like. Each beehive-like cell had an incubating sasquatch egg. Septu said "a ha!" and started invading each egg simultaneously, looking at what's inside. What he saw inside were smilies. Yellow emoticons with a colourful mother-of-pearl borders. Almost all the emoticons were smiling and 2 dimensional. On the back of each emoticon, where the sticker normally goes, there was a portal which was connected to the place where G-d creates tiny red deer alberta sasquatches, and sends them to populate the emoticons, being the soul that goes inside the built thing that awaits inside the egg. The emoticon basically has a personality, and when the R.D.A. sasquatch soul bonds with it, they become one entity. That is why RDA sasquatches "barf" their babies out.

    Septu was caught offguard by the sasquatch so he changed all the smilies and turned them into Sheppard's Pie, thereby creating a brand new species of Sheppard's Pie Sasquatch mutations. Months later, as the father sasquatch was barfing his kids out, he proceeded to eat them because the sheppard's pie looked mmm mmm good, like there ain't no tomorrow. From one pipe down the other.

    By then Septu was trimentions away from the ordinary and the forest. He went back to Forest Hill to invisibly visit the grade 10 japs. He poked them with a stick and danced on the basketball court. They got so excited that they bought cafeteria fries and put them upside down on their heads with the gravy dripping off of their ears.​

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  16. shichimenshyo Caught in the machine Registered Senior Member

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    Jesus man you must have been doing a shit ton of drugs.
     
  17. otheadp Banned Banned

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    I was sober at the time I wrote it, but a comedown lasts about 4 days, and it was the first day. I was really really out of it and not in any sort of condition to do work... I was also severely underslept. Very irresponsible behaviour (I don't do this anymore).

    But yeah, I think as strange as it came out, it's a pretty interesting piece, no?
     
  18. shichimenshyo Caught in the machine Registered Senior Member

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    I would say it perfectly encapsulates the mind of a person on a drug binge, having had a similar drug binge experience I thought it was interesting to say the least. =p
     
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    U got it. It was a morning hangover in the midst of a multi-day binge, in the midst of several multi-day binges with only 1 week in between each. Shitty period...

    Oh well. It's behind me

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    And I got this brain blurb as a souvenir.
     
  20. shichimenshyo Caught in the machine Registered Senior Member

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    Yes, Yes you do. XD
     
  21. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    The Ghost’s of Nain.

    They gird their loins; they drag their chains,
    and reap the rising of the tide.
    And slake their thirst on the sea, and cry their
    salty sad lament.

    The ghost’s of Nain are here again, and whom
    could they themselves do blame, ill said,
    said ill and out again! And hit the houses with
    the chains.

    They gird their girths, they ride the rain, and fly
    this fear torn phantom frame.
    And fear does fly; they filch the fowls and skirt,
    the myriad shantytowns.

    And there they creep, through cracks they peep,
    And all they see, they see and eat!

    And those that run? They chase for fun, and pluck them
    all up one by one.
    And those that hide? They skin alive and chortle whist
    they tan your hide.

    And those that fight? Might, just might! Live to see
    another night.
    And when they go, they go away! But will be back
    another day.

    Ill said, said ill and out again! Beware the coming
    of the Nain.
     
  22. ScaryMonster I’m the whispered word. Valued Senior Member

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    Limbo’s White Noise Hiss.

    As it bit it burned, the anesthetic
    smell and I died for just a little
    while.
    And in that warm dark waiting
    there.

    I fought to find you; I heard
    your voice in limbo’s white
    noise hiss.

    And alone I searched for my
    lost young love. Who left
    me so long ago.

    And in the land of death
    I meet you yet, to me you
    flicked so, a glimpse, a smile
    a kiss, and bliss.

    And then a pulse did beat!
    ’We almost most lost you’
    But I lost more, and in pain
    I cried for you once more.

    And forever beyond my
    minds recall you wait
    beside the fettered walls
    of limbo’s white noise
    hiss.
     
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    Ruddiger Pew

    Ruddiger Pew was just is
    like you,
    he counts them all out two
    by two.

    And when there’s only two
    more left, he adds them to
    the one that’s next.

    And when he measures he
    checks them twice, he licks
    his lips and wipes his knife.

    He drains the blood and wraps
    the bones; he fits them in their
    future homes.

    And in the basement he bricks
    them in, he carves the corpses
    and wears the skins

    And when he’s ready he does
    prepare, he bites the tongues
    and wears the hair.

    He combs his crop and dons he’s
    hat, grabs his hooks and pats
    the cat.

    So into the night he does repair,
    to capture those who don’t
    prepare.

    And he waits and bides his
    time; he cuts the thoughts and
    slits the lies.

    And then he sprinkles it all in lime;
    this is Ruddiger’s feeding time!

    His hooks glint brightly and with
    hands blood red he drags them all
    back to his slaughter shed.

    Yes Ruddiger Pew is just like you,
    and lives in number 32, so when you
    see him wave real nice and try to stay
    inside at night.
     
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