Shallow

Discussion in 'Free Thoughts' started by Increan, Jul 22, 2002.

  1. Increan Sage Registered Senior Member

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    Shallow

    Never seeing, Never being
    Never knowing, Never growing
    Always the same, Cannot be blamed

    Taking kindness for granted
    Abusing the power of beauty
    Completely oblivious to whats going on

    Only you exist in your world
    Condemed to be unhappy
    But still not understanding

    Selfish is the path you take
    Underestimating the competition
    Losing before its begun

    Focusing on self-image
    Look how superficial your life has become
    Should have made friends instead of copies

    No one is there in your times of need
    Is anyone good enough?
    Does anyone measure-up?

    Destined to be alone
    Unable to comprehend the error of your ways


    S.G.




    Not my best work, but I decided to post it anyways
     
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  3. Xev Registered Senior Member

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    Not as good as the rest, I think it needs a bit more - depth - but the alliteration here:

    Never seeing, Never being
    Never knowing, Never growing

    Is utterly and completely fucking brilliant!
     
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  5. Increan Sage Registered Senior Member

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    thanks
     
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  7. ReaLiTY.FaiLuRe Registered Member

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    Lovely!

    You have more?
    I would like to read your others, I can relate to this one A LOT.
     
  8. Increan Sage Registered Senior Member

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  9. BloodSuckingGerbile Master of Puppets Registered Senior Member

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    Cool, dude!
    You rule!

    Mind if I write a melody?

    I think it will sound great with some heavy metal riffs.
     
  10. Increan Sage Registered Senior Member

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    Be my guest. I like to here it put to music.
     
  11. James R Just this guy, you know? Staff Member

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    Nice.
     
  12. Aussie Registered Member

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    great work - all of them. very subtle, yet capturing.
    ever had any published??
     
  13. Increan Sage Registered Senior Member

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    Thank You, and no I have not had any published but was thinking of trying.
     
  14. BloodSuckingGerbile Master of Puppets Registered Senior Member

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    What's your best work?
     
  15. Increan Sage Registered Senior Member

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    That's a matter of opinion, check out the links to the others in an above post and decide for yourself.
     

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